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Sunday, September 24, 2017

Weekend Writing Warriors September 24, 2017


   
            A quick mention before my post.  The wewriwa linky list is once again hosting the "First Page Review" blog hop. It runs from the 1st of October through the 31st. There's a linky list to sign on so readers can find your post. The idea is simple--you post your first page or so--up to a thousand words. It's good promo if you've got something published that you'd like to get readers' eyes on. Or, if you share something unpublished, you get some feedback, and find out if readers would turn the page and continue reading.  Sign up here The First Page Review .
On to this week's wewriwa.
            It's time for
snips and bits of amazing tales by talented writers! Weekend Writing Warriors is a weekly bloghop. Each week, participants sign up HERE at wewriwa.com, then post 8 to 10 sentences of their work, published or unpublished, on their own blog to go live by before 9:00 AM Sunday, EST. (We check signups to remove links when we don't find a wewriwa post--to save our participants from clicking on empty links--so please have it live by 9:00 Sunday morning--eastern USA. Then we visit each other and read, comment, critique, encourage--all those things that do a solitary writer's heart good. 

 
            Snippet Sunday group from facebook--not us, but many of our participants do both, can be found HERE
           
This week's snippet is from "The Sands of Dhor".
I've skipped ahead a couple of paras. Lily, abducted from Earth by alien slavers, is following Theusand. He's not a slaver.  He's Dhor'en; they communicate mind to mind. 
            They've left the section of the ship where he and his Chays (monks) are quartered. It's the first time she's left that deck since Lord Sand rescued her from the slave fight ring in the belly of the ship.  Their conversation has become more of a debate and he always wins--by willing her into silence. in Lily's POV.



As usual, she was so wrong and he was so right--and that was the case whether it was true or not. The idea of perspective seemed to escape this very alien man.

“I do comprehend your human concept of perspective.” His thoughts had actually sounded  matter-of-fact.
It's not that she'd forgotten he was almost always in her head; just more and more often she found herself not giving a shit what she thought, or how he felt about it. "So...what? You just never consider it whenever you're stating everything like it's the God's honest truth?"
He stopped walking and leaned down low to look at her. A glint of blue sparkled from beneath his hood. “God is a concept best left for another walk, another talk.” 

Talking God with an alien might be a whole new can of worms...
What works and what doesn't? I'm grateful for every bit of feedback you share.

Saturday, September 2, 2017

Weekend Writing Warriors Sept. 3, 2017

     Happy September, all!

            It's time for
snips and bits of amazing tales by talented writers! Weekend Writing Warriors is a weekly bloghop. Each week, participants sign up HERE at wewriwa.com, then post 8 to 10 sentences of their work, published or unpublished, on their own blog to go live by before 9:00 AM Sunday, EST. (We check signups to remove links when we don't find a wewriwa post--to save our participants from clicking on empty links--so please have it live by 9:00 Sunday morning--eastern USA. Then we visit each other and read, comment, critique, encourage--all those things that do a solitary writer's heart good. 

             Snippet Sunday group from facebook--not us, but many of our participants do both, can be found HERE
           
This week's snippet is from "The Sands of Dhor".
I've skipped ahead a couple of paras. Lily, abducted from Earth by alien slavers, is following Theusand. He's not a slaver.  He's Dhor'en; they communicate mind to mind. 
            They've left the section of the ship where he and his Chays (monks) are quartered. It's the first time she's left that deck since Lord Sand rescued her from the slave fight ring in the belly of the ship.  Their conversation is stuck on Earth's college level health class. The first sentence this week is spoken by Theusand:  


“Of course I do not, but perhaps you needed to hear yourself say it. When your angry words fly, your mind loses any sense of logic it may have had.  Let me begin again. I have studied your Health 101 memories.”
“For Christ’s sake, you’ve driven that point home quite well. I know you know all about our freshman health class.”
He nodded at her. His words were full of that oh-so-infuriating calm when he said, “I do, indeed.  Do you recall learning about stasis?”
What works and what doesn't? I'm grateful for every bit of feedback you share.

Saturday, August 26, 2017

Weekend Writing Warriors August 27, 2017

It's time for snips and bits of amazing tales by talented writers! Weekend Writing Warriors is a weekly bloghop. Each week, participants sign up HERE at wewriwa.com, then post 8 to 10 sentences of their work, published or unpublished, on their own blog to go live by before 9:00 AM Sunday, EST. (We check signups to remove links when we don't find a wewriwa post--to save our participants from clicking on empty links--so please have it live by 9:00 Sunday morning--eastern USA. Then we visit each other and read, comment, critique, encourage--all those things that do a solitary writer's heart good. 
             Snippet Sunday group from facebook--not us, but many of our participants do both, can be found HERE
            
This week's snippet is from "The Sands of Dhor". Lily, abducted from Earth by alien slavers, is following Theusand. He'd not a slaver.  He's Dhor'en; they communicate mind to mind. 

            They've left the section of the ship where he and his Chays (monks) are quartered. It's the first time she's left that deck since Lord Sand rescued her from the slave fight ring in the belly of the ship.  He has just accused her of being irrational.   She accused him of causing her irrationality. Then he did a very human thing--laughed, and it has begun to thaw her heart. The last sentence posted last week was spoken by Theusand: There are worse things I could cause you to do.”


Continuing from there...

"Yeah. And I bet before you get me back to Earth, I’ll have experienced all of them.”

His voice went back to cool and even, his smile and his laughter gone. “As I said, I have assimilated the content of your books of learning. “
“When? Wait. How...why did you do that?” 
“None of that is necessary to complete this conversation. 'Higher education’ as your people refer to it, specifically health--have you studied health?”
 That last question sounds like bait to me. What an emotional rollercoaster ride he is, huh? She just gets a little soft spot for him, and then he turns back on the arrogance, full force. Or is there another reason his mirth vanished?
What works and what doesn't? I'm grateful for every bit of feedback you share.
The following photo shows where I was last week. We drove south several states to see totality. Very cool...




Sunday, August 6, 2017

Weekend Writing Warriors August 6, 2017

Hello fellow Warriors (and Snippeteers). Welcome to August. Yikes!
  It's time for snips and bits of amazing tales by talented writers! Weekend Writing Warriors is a weekly bloghop. Each week, participants sign up HERE at wewriwa.com, then post 8 to 10 sentences of their work, published or unpublished, on their own blog to go live by before 9:00 AM Sunday, EST. (We check signups to remove links when we don't find a wewriwa post--to save our participants from clicking on empty links--so please have it live by 9:00 Sunday morning--eastern USA). Then we visit each other and read, comment, critique, encourage--all those things that do a solitary writer's heart good. 
             Snippet Sunday group from facebook--not us, but many of our participants do both, can be found HERE
            
This week's snippet is from "The Sands of Dhor". Lily, abducted from Earth by alien slavers, is following Theusand--he's a different kind of alien. They've left the section of the ship where he and his Chays (monks) are quartered. It's the first time she's left that deck since Lord Sand rescued her from the slave fight ring in the belly of the ship.  They are having a discussion and the topic has turned to humans.  The last sentence posted last week was spoken by Lily:
“How can we have an honest conversation when you repeatedly slap me with a mental gag order?”


Continuing from there...

“A mental gag order… Oh, I see.” His smirk came through unhampered. “We would never finish a conversation if I allowed your irrationality to proceed.”
“You know, at home, on Earth, I’m not known as an irrational person. In fact, people respect my logic, my intelligence, and my ability to be calm in the face of the worst storm. Could it be that you are the cause of my newfound irrationality’?”
He did something she’d never witnessed him do, something so human it softened her heart. He laughed out loud. Then he said, “There are worse things I could cause you to do.”


 What works and what doesn't? I'm grateful for every bit of feedback you share.
  Is anyone in the path of eclipse  totality--or driving to see it? :-)
  A short note about sidebar promos.  :-) Sidebar promos on wewriwa.com spots are available at no cost as a perk of regularly participating in Weekend Writing Warriors. If you're interested, all we need is an email from you that includes the link to the Amazon page of the book you'd like to see on our sidebar. Our email address is: wewriwa at yahoo dot com

Sunday, July 30, 2017

Weekend Writing Warriors: July 30, 2017

Hello fellow Warriors (and Snippeteers). The last post of July! Can you believe it?
  It's time for snips and bits of amazing tales by talented writers! Weekend Writing Warriors is a weekly bloghop. Each week, participants sign up HERE at wewriwa.com, then post 8 to 10 sentences of their work, published or unpublished, on their own blog to go live by before 9:00 AM Sunday, EST. (We check signups to remove links when we don't find a wewriwa post--to save our participants from clicking on empty links--so please have it live by 9:00 Sunday morning--eastern USA). Then we visit each other and read, comment, critique, encourage--all those things that do a solitary writer's heart good. 
             Snippet Sunday group from facebook--not us, but many of our participants do both, can be found HERE
               
  This week's snippet is from "The Sands of Dhor". Lily, abducted from Earth by alien slavers, is following Theusand--he's a different kind of alien. They've left the section of the ship where he and his Chays (monks) are quartered. It's the first time she's left that deck since Lord Sand rescued her from the slave fight ring in the belly of the ship.  They are having a discussion and the topic has turned to humans and a weakness.
  The last sentence posted from this scene was: Her mouth continued to move but no words would come.

Continuing from there...
Theusand filled the new silence. “Children are the exception. As a design of an advanced organism, young humans accept change as a survival tool likely because their existence at that stage is constant change. If they stressed over each change, they might not survive to adulthood.”
“You are full of…” Her words ceased—nothing would come; the bastard had cut her off again.
“I have assimilated the knowledge in your education books.”
Her voice returned,  and what he'd assimilated was the least of her thoughts. “How can we have an honest conversation when you repeatedly slap me with a mental gag order?” 

 What works and what doesn't? I'm grateful for every bit of feedback you share.
 It's good to be back. Last week's respite was a trip to the Twilight Zone of no phone, no internet (thank you, Consolidated Communications) and also a journey into the strange world the splicer created when he not only left the job incomplete, but somehow managed to splice our feed wire to the phone line of our neighbor--who was not happy when he came to tell us that our calls were going to his house. ~sigh~ Honestly, we did not request the reroute so he could act as our social secretary.
  A short note about sidebar promos.  :-) Sidebar promos on wewriwa.com spots are available at no cost as a perk of regularly participating in Weekend Writing Warriors. If you're interested, all we need is an email from you that includes the link to the Amazon page of the book you'd like to see on our sidebar. Our email address is: wewriwa at yahoo dot com